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Post by Zach Braff [Pgcool] on Sept 29, 2010 17:45:50 GMT -5
Alina
-You competed last week which may be what saves you tonight. We'll have to see how it goes!
Alx13
Once again you fail to complete another task... You were so excited about this game before it started, and now you're putting forth no episode.
Damien
Your "fun persuasive paper" was very short (which is fine, but in your case...) you failed to tell us what the concept of the show will be, and I just don't find it very persuading. It would definitely not be able to compete in the big leagues of show pitching, but none the less... you put forth an effort and I am glad to see that!
Erick
Another person who has not posted for this task... You worked last week so maybe you'll be safe?
Jigsaw
I liked your concept. The format wasn't exactly what I was expecting (I was more just expecting a paragraph or 2 saying everything about the show) but nonetheless you have a good idea. I would just work on formatting for you (sorry to say this) essay style.
Nick
I really enjoy your idea. It reminds me of a sort of Lost/Persons Unknown sort of thing and it sounds like it would be a huge hit. The only advice I have to offer you is to avoid using the word I. It sort of ruins the whole feel of a pitch.
Profile (Emmy)
Your idea is very, very good. To me it sounds like a very good CSI show, with mysteries within the corporation, along with some Lost feel to it. It would be a huge hit. Your persuasive paper dragged on quite a bit though. The only advice I have is to get to the point sooner instead of saying "This is going to blow your mind (goes a bit off topic). This is really going to blow your mind (off topic a bit again). Now I will tell you why this is going to blow your minds... Overall this was really good, but just work on getting to the point.
Tomas
Your idea sounds sort of like a Jonas Brothers show to me. The writing of your paper was pretty good, but the format was a bit weird. I think character descriptions should all be in one paragraph, and then show info in another instead of having each person have their own paragraph. It was fairly good, but can use some work.
Results are coming soon!
-You competed last week which may be what saves you tonight. We'll have to see how it goes!
Alx13
Once again you fail to complete another task... You were so excited about this game before it started, and now you're putting forth no episode.
Damien
Your "fun persuasive paper" was very short (which is fine, but in your case...) you failed to tell us what the concept of the show will be, and I just don't find it very persuading. It would definitely not be able to compete in the big leagues of show pitching, but none the less... you put forth an effort and I am glad to see that!
Erick
Another person who has not posted for this task... You worked last week so maybe you'll be safe?
Jigsaw
I liked your concept. The format wasn't exactly what I was expecting (I was more just expecting a paragraph or 2 saying everything about the show) but nonetheless you have a good idea. I would just work on formatting for you (sorry to say this) essay style.
Nick
I really enjoy your idea. It reminds me of a sort of Lost/Persons Unknown sort of thing and it sounds like it would be a huge hit. The only advice I have to offer you is to avoid using the word I. It sort of ruins the whole feel of a pitch.
Profile (Emmy)
Your idea is very, very good. To me it sounds like a very good CSI show, with mysteries within the corporation, along with some Lost feel to it. It would be a huge hit. Your persuasive paper dragged on quite a bit though. The only advice I have is to get to the point sooner instead of saying "This is going to blow your mind (goes a bit off topic). This is really going to blow your mind (off topic a bit again). Now I will tell you why this is going to blow your minds... Overall this was really good, but just work on getting to the point.
Tomas
Your idea sounds sort of like a Jonas Brothers show to me. The writing of your paper was pretty good, but the format was a bit weird. I think character descriptions should all be in one paragraph, and then show info in another instead of having each person have their own paragraph. It was fairly good, but can use some work.
Results are coming soon!
Thanks Pgcool for hosting this. 
